Re: [SkunkworksAMA] New file uploaded to SkunkworksAMA

From: Cedric <cedric_at_deru.com>
Date: Thu, 13 Jun 2002 00:11:02 -0700

I think you need to learn punctuation!

nothing agaisnt the story but the first paragraph is missing at least 4
quite marks, I cant tell who's saying what especially with how you have all
the dialogue compressed into one paragraph.

hint: each new speaker should at least have their own paragraph, you dont
need to conserve space.

Ced


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> File : /Skunkworks Fan Fiction/Desiree and the Trio Pleases the
> Troops episode 4.doc
> Uploaded by : aerosmithacdc <aerosmithacdc_at_yahoo.com>
> Description : after long wait here is episode 4 tell me what you think
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Received on Thu Jun 13 2002 - 00:08:31 CDT