I hope you all got some merry skunksarse (no such luck for
me) and are enjoying the nude deer (or found a nice picture
of one on the internet).
Brandon, your imagination does get around! Good to see you
haven't exhausted your well of zany ideas to keep the
sister in trouble! Maybe you could write a 'Court Case'
story that doesn't have to be for any specific incident
where the girls have to use their charms to convince a jury
that they should be let off for being a 'little naughty'?
One of the few criticisms (and one that is hard to avoid)
is repetition of expression. Findind different ways to
describe what is going on. A thesaurus helps, though often
just a sentence restructure will avoid the phrasing.
Particularly in aspect of describing the girl's speech.
A tip for all doing anthro writing; ensure you have
references to their animal charateristics. Brandon has the
spraying incidents for example. If you can substitute the
names of three other girls and have them run wild, then it
isn't much of an anthro story. Doesn't stop it being a
_good_ story, but since we are dealing with anthro
characters, it is good give descriptions that reminds the
reader of this.
The dragon waved his claws airily before scratching his
scaled jaw as he thought what he should write next. His
long black tail twitched and he thought of a good example!
"See, this paragraph lends itself to showing a dragon is
the speaker, for humans don't posses the described
characteristics."
Keep on writing furs, you only become great with practice
and publication!
Scrapper, Black Dragon, making his little effort towards
greatness... ;-)
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Received on Wed Jan 08 2003 - 17:28:42 CST