--- islime_raaka <islime_raaka_at_yahoo.com> wrote:
> The pic is in the files section. i wanted to show off
> trixi hear since shes an inverse skunk...
> i like getting comments and if anyone has any
> art tips ill love to hear them. thanks. AL
Getting feedback is hard; not really in terms of writing
it, just getting furs to give you some! I'm not a gun
artist like some furs around here, but I can still spot
things and give you a few pointers.
This is quite a decent digital picture. Concept and
composition are quite appealing. Listed below are a few
things that I would do differently (even though I probably
can't do better); trying to give you an awareness so you
can 'do even better next time', as opposed to running your
work down. Just telling you what I see.
Nice pose though hands are at an angle that would be
uncomfortable - elbows too 'pulled in' for wrist angle.
Fingernails instead of claws are an artist's choice;
personally prefer big, curved claws. :-) Her left (viewer's
right) wrist appears a little thick compared to her forearm
toward the elbow.
Fur on tail should all go upwards and outwards due to lay
of fur (you've got it going downward at the top).
Lighting, particularly on arms appears not quite right -
light source in top right according to viewer perspective
(as marked by eye shine), not consistent across body.
Viewer must be short (or sitting) or Trixie is quite tall,
as proportion and perspecitve view point suggests she is
looking down on me. Nothing really wrong with this, just an
'unusual' perspective.
Inverse colours are a nice variation, though watch your
colour blends of the black in grey - very easy to make it
muddy and 'look digital' due to being too regular with the
shaping. Even with an airbrush I get a 'more random'
shaping. It also pays to not use black for shading; better
to use a dark blue (or have a tinge of blue in the black)
or a darker version of some other 'reflected' colour in the
picture. Helps avoid the digital look, as RL doesn't have
things that are 'true black'; they will nearly always have
'colour contamination' of a reflected colour.
Puzzled on this for a while, but finally concluded the gap
between her legs, most probably near her shorts, appears
wrong, accentuates that she doesn't have a lot of curve on
her hips towards the top of her thigh (pretty straight in
regard to outside line).
Good to see focus variation for background, adds to to
picture depth, though ideally you should soften the lines
on her tail a little, since this is further away and should
subsequently be softer in focus. Another way is to use
thinner lines on further away objects, giving them less
definition and softer focus.
Shirt colour is good, though would not have used grey for
shorts - makes the pic look dark as there is 'too much
black'; dark blue would have been a better choice, I'd
suggest.
Text on her shirt is funny, but would have used a font then
blended/bowed it (or use stretch) to follow the contours
better. At the moment the depth appears wrong and the font
almost appears to be floating in front of her (outline too
sharp, doesn't follow her chest shape). Similar to the
stretch lines of her shirt - would make them less opaque
and broader, as they are material folds and not true lines
as such.
Please don't take this as me being whingy - if I'd received
this pic as an art trade or commission, I'd be pretty damn
happy! Just trying to give you some feedback so your next
picture of Trixie will be even better than this one. She
can come and sit on my knee anytime! Keep up the good
work. Care to try your paw at the Terrible Trio? I'm sure
furs on this group would like to see them done in your
style!
Scrapper, Black Dragon, who had written this report a few
days ago while offline, but hadn't brought it with him to post...
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Received on Mon May 31 2004 - 16:15:17 CDT