--- Bryan Olds <blackwolf_78_at_yahoo.com> wrote:
> Well heres another new sketch but rather this time a
> short comic i
> didn't have time to color, but I hope you enjoy it.
Came out okay - doesn't really need colour. Good gag value
- I could well imagine that occurring. Maybe a few 'pain
stars' in the third panel to indicate Mr H isn't enjoying
his lie down? Few things I've spotted that need a little
help:
Follow-through lines on Jim's collar run upwards like his
collar is sitting high on the far side - easy fix. You've
done the hairstyle of Lori and attributed it to Natasha.
He jaw line (literally) is a bit thick/fuzzy that distorts
the face shape. Fine seconds with an eraser will fix that.
Good to see typed font in dialogue - probably a bit bold
though - seems to swamp the picture, IMHO. And don't use
emoticons in dialogue - you have the visual component - use
that! I'd have just concluded with ellipses in that case.
Great to see you putting pencil on paper - keep up the good
work.
Scrapper, Black Dragon, talking and thinking about drawing
quite frequently. Doing on rare occasions...
http://groups.yahoo.com/group/SkunkworksAMA/files/Fan%20Art/Step%20lightly.jpg/
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Received on Thu Aug 25 2005 - 18:10:55 CDT
