A good piece of work. Attention to line detail and highlighting
is good.
I see the solid triangle noses are out. "T" nose's require more
work but are worth it in the end.
Some observations, if Jim doesn't mind, on possible flaws; but
may be due to scanning and are not in the original. [Jim did
say the scan lost a lot of detail.]
Chains: Perspective problem due to highlights. Highlight not
the same. Right one, (Onyx's Right, is darker.) Is employee sign
suppose to be washing out left chain? Lighter chain pulls away from
wall, closer to viewer; Darker chain pushes to wall going into
background, but Onyx foot is forward of her body front. [Highlight
both to same light level.]
Shadows, Light Source, Sun Angle: Were the angles computer calculated?
Looks like around 30 degrees, give or take a few: 2 O'Clock. Light
source is to the left and forward of Onyx. Onyx left; Dangling rope
to rug, touching rug? Shadow seems to be missing across rug to left
arm. (Washed out by scan?) Right chain is missing it's shadow, (left
hand edge of drawing.) Red frame around drawing may be covering it up?
Shadow Balance Perspective problem: Onyx's left chain's shadow pulls
the drawings right side outward, giving a 3-D look, (which is good);
but the missing Right chain's shadow on the drawing's left side
reduces to 2-D. [Place a shadow for Onyx's right chain.]
Eye highlight: Good highlight brightness, but rotate iris highlight
up, counterclockwise, just a tad, to match angle of chain-ring-shadow
and chain-ring. You placed in Onyx's pupil a point of light, (a dot),
in each eye; then placed the iris highlight too low, just a tad. Iris
highlight is at 3 O'Clock, Sun is at 2 O'Clock. Highlight should be at
2 O'Clock as well.
(Right Leg shadow is fine.)
Horizon line: Nose level. Good position. (You are using them right?)
Lower Drawing Content, and Vanishing Point problem: What is Onyx's rug
sitting on? A crate? A wooden bench? Sign indicates a parking lot. Not
black asphalt? It looks like a flat wooden floor. Wooden planks
perspective near wall is fine, but goes flat at bottom of drawing.
(Perspective comes apart at bottom of page.) With a central vanishing
point the planks should be like those well known railroad ties
disappearing into the background, but large in the foreground. The
last 3 planks at the bottom of the page seem to be the problem. Also,
the wooden plank at the bottom left corner isn't angled well for a
central vanishing point. (Where did you place the little rascal?)
All these possible flaws doesn't really hurt the overall artwork. It's
a bit of observational nitpicking. It's a good piece of work. Jim's
art ability is growing. Hope he doesn't mind about the observations.
Sell as a print?
Received on Tue Mar 13 2007 - 01:10:49 CDT