--- In SkunkworksAMA_at_y..., "M. Mitchell Marmel" <marmelmm_at_d...> wrote:
> At 3:46 PM +0000 9/29/01, Shad Devil wrote:
> >..critiques etc on me story. Be truthful, as long you
> >don't go insulting me too hard, I can take it.
>
> There wasn't a dry seat in the house. :D
>
> Serious critique: Good work overall. The setup works, the main
scene
> was handled well and the denouement was in character. Grammar was
a
> tad stiff in spots, but not to the point of unreadability.
>
> Overall, a competent bit of spooge. Good show!
>
> -MMM-
Thankies for the compliment but could you point out a bit more
specifically on where it got stiff (the GRAMMAR..not that....)?
Perhaps over Icq if you have it so we don'T spam the club too much of
this. (ICQ: 126306018)
-Shad "I always take this seriously." Devil
Received on Sat Sep 29 2001 - 09:25:27 CDT