I hope you don't mind a little criticism here.
I'm glad that your essay won, and that you even wrote in the first place
shows that you are at least above average intelligence. ( I can't even
remember the last time I wrote an essay.. :p) Good Job.
Now for the critique...
The paper does not really seem to have a point, other than furs try to
follow the Golden Rule. I was always taught that when writing an essay or
paper, first you lay out your thesis ( or the point you plan to make) and
then give supporting reasons either in favor or not. Most of your essay is
based on your opinion, and there is nothing wrong with that. I was just
under the impression that it was something different based on the way you
started your essay.
Please don't take the criticism the wrong way. Continue to write, at least
you are one of us out there that is not afraid to show that you have an
education. :)
I have met plenty of people who were to lazy to actually write something and
use their brain.
I have no idea where I'm going with this....
Kiyo
http://groups.yahoo.com/group/SkunkworksAMA/files/Other/English.doc
qjohnsmith qjohnsmith_at_yahoo.com
Received on Wed Dec 11 2002 - 02:45:30 CST