--- "kallie_mouse <kalliemouse_at_hotmail.com>"
<kalliemouse_at_hotmail.com> wrote:
> This is the first story i have ever writen or posted
> anywhere. coments, advice and thoughts are more then
>welcome.
Well done Kallie! You've shown that you come up with good
story ideas yet again! Now you've made use of a few. :-)
Two spelling errors I picked up on while reading and a few
words that are spelt correctly, but is the incorrect word
for the application, eg "body's" should have been "bodies".
The descriptions are quite good, and with practice I think
you'll prove yourself as a very capable writer. I enjoyed
this story and the way it built suspense. Good
descriptions and references that we are dealing with furs
and not some human.
I was initially puzzled about the use of italics, till I
figured out what you were doing. I generally wouldn't
advise their use unless you are emphasising a point. I
tend to use capitals for this. For dream sequences,
especially since the reader is supposed to figure it out,
I'd write the story as though it were really happening,
then as the reader progresses they figure out it is a
dream.
Get someone to proof read your work for you. It will pick
up lots of little errors that are easy to over read. I am
willing to assist furs, if they want someone to read and
suggest for them. Final posting in HTML format is space
efficient too. If you are using MS Word: go File, Save As,
change the file type to HTML and SAVE. As simple as that
(providing the HTML module was loaded when Word was
installed).
Overall, a worthwhile read, furs, check it out.
Scrapper, Black Dragon, always pleased to see furs contributing.
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Received on Wed Feb 12 2003 - 21:25:41 CST