Rachel, my apologies for not giving you feedback earlier.
I hate it when you post work and no one comments. :-(
I have just read through this story now. A few grammatical
and formatting errors (all minor), but in gerernal DAMN
GOOD story!
You have very good ideas, clear expression and great
'illustration' of scenes. When you write about a
character, they can really be 'seen', and understand what
they are doing. Your work is also fresh and pleasant to
read. It moves along well and doesn't get bogged down with
details or wordy phrasing (*cough* unlike certain dragon's
work...)
I'm looking forward to the next installments of this story.
If you would like a proof reader, I will get back to you
far quicker if you are 'waiting to post' then I have if I'm
doing it retrospectively.
Furs, if you haven't read this latest installment by
Rachel, take the few minutes out and do so! You will not
be disappointed! If you like the story, PLEASE post
feedback. If furs ignore you, then we don't tend to feel
motivated to generate more good works. The more we hear
about the things you like, the more of it we feel
encouraged to produce for you.
Scrapper, Black Dragon, very pleased to see more quality
literature appearing in the group.
> File : /Skunkworks Fan Fiction/Portfolio Madness.doc
> Uploaded by : rach676 <rachel12_at_tampabay.rr.com>
> Description : Sequel 'The New Model' Val and Jareth are
> now a item, but the girls arriving back from vacation
> don't know it.
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Received on Thu Jul 31 2003 - 00:33:25 CDT