There's good detail work here.
Look at the clock in panel 2 and 6. The minute-hand
shows motion of time as Manila moves through the house.
[Clock minute-hand in last panel needed to be advanced
a bit though; dovetailing clock time passing with Manila's
reflecting on her own amount of time that has passed by.]
Nice house in Panel One. [Short ruler and pencil?
...and am I seeing blue pencil line work?]
I see Jim's been allowed to restyle the characters.
How far can you go with the restyling? [I notice
Manila doesn't have any earrings; in the model sheet
or comic page.]
Congrats on the first page. Over all good work.
[...Well...there's that door frame in the last panel.]
Received on Sat Aug 28 2010 - 23:29:21 CDT